As a writer it has amazed me how playing with words can have a huge impact on how well we bring a story to life. Simply adding, taking away or changing the order of words can bring a story to life instantly.
I have written the very short extract below as a bit of an experiment. It bares no relevance to any work in progress but I would welcome your feedback. Does it work for you? Does it leave you wanting more? Do you feel what Aidan is feeling? The answers to these questions are more useful than you think and constructive criticism is always welcome too! I look forward to hearing from you. Mark
‘As he stumbled out of the house to heavy rain and strong winds, Aidan knew they would not be too far behind him. His blurred vision courtesy of the drug that had now taken control of each muscle in his body coupled with the medicinal smell of sterilising solution made him feel nauseous and desperate. Struggling to overcome each wave of sickness with every step, he kept going. He felt his way along each garden from wall to wall innocently unaware that he had completed a full circle and was heading straight for them. The wind rushed through him like a steam train robbing him of every sound along the way. Then suddenly, the world went dark.’