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   Haya · April 9, 2015

   Read your 101 challenge. I was able to feel the tension. Much was expressed in few words. good one. Finally, was it a day saving a daughter in a days work -or- a fireman(not her father) comforting a tensed girl inspite of being tensed too?

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   Haya · April 9, 2015

   Read your 101 challenge. I was able to feel the tension. Much was expressed in few words. good one. Finally, was it the father saving a daughter in a day’s work -or- a fireman(not her father) comforting a tensed girl inspite of being tensed too?

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   cypherseeker · July 29, 2015

   HI, i’m fairly new to wordpress as well and saw your comment on the community pool. I’m also in the same boat trying to get some more readers to my site and I added you to my follow list. I read one of your most recent blogs and to me its quality not quantity that matters to me as a reader for your question on desired chapter length.

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     drakes1 · July 29, 2015

     Hey! Thank you very much for stopping by and for your feedback. It is very much appreciated. Keep going! The followers will come. Mark

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   cypherseeker · August 1, 2015

   Just read chapter 1 of “Reunion.” I felt the dialogue came off natural and flowed well with the scene. I also liked how you ended the chapter with a kind of mini cliff hanger in that the bartender/waiter seemed to know who Laura was, and having not read on further, I’m not sure if this is a positive or negative association. I also like your idea of what psychological horror should be in media and I’m not sure if you are a gamer or not but there is a series called Silent Hill which focuses expertly in this genre (especially messing with the player’s mind-its classic here to be lead to believe one thing and then a sudden twist reshapes your perspective on what happened hours ago in the game).

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     drakes1 · August 2, 2015

     Thank you for your positive feedback! I love playing with the mind. The possibilities are endless! Thanks again.

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   cypherseeker · August 5, 2015

   Just read chapter 2, again you do a great job building this suspense throughout, and again, the chapter ends on a cliffhanger. A nice hook for any reader to move on to chapter 3. Out of curiosity, is this a standalone story or is it going to be a series?

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     drakes1 · August 5, 2015

     Hey! I’m glad your’e enjoy it. I am unsure where to take it at the moment but I will shortly be writing another short story following the same format. Releasing a chapter each week.

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   cypherseeker · August 12, 2015

   As will be no surprise, I read chapter 4 and loved it. I like how there was a Black Christmas (1974) esque moment with how the chapter finishes with the police having traced the call right back to the one place we would least suspect.

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     drakes1 · August 12, 2015

     Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I love a good twist so my mind is constantly ticking with new ideas of how I create the ‘gasp’ factor! I will be starting another short story very soon. Mark

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